Rough Cut Feedback

After handing in my rough cut of my video, I have been given useful feedback. This is a helpful way of developing my work as it is easy to get too involved with the product and an outsider's fresh perspective can give advice that I would not have otherwise realised.

One of the pointers that I was given is that the narrative is not clear enough and is a bit 'choppy'. Currently, the footage constantly goes back and forth over his struggle to overcome his addiction whereas I have been advised that to split it into more obvious sections would make the narrative clear to the audience. The way that I am now going to rearrange my clips is by the introducing the protagonist and his problem; temptation; the rabbit; his struggle to overcome it; and then his relapse and have fast cuts of the footage previously seen to show how it is a dangerous circle which he is struggling to get out of.

Another pointer is that, despite having the light rays effect, the chorus' and the fantastical narrative is not different enough. I understand this as the chorus is when the music really builds up to its peak and so I need to reflect this in my video. Therefore, I am going to add the RGB effect on top of the light rays so that I can create more of a contrast without losing the effect.